Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Joy


One day on my b-day I was out goofing around with my friends and I heard my parent fighting I went inside to see what was going on but as soon as I got inside I got kicked out. I was wondering what was going on so I climbed the deck. I listened to what they were saying and I heard my mom say. "I can' believe they bought her a puppy." I couldn't believe it. I claimed down the deck so quickly that I nearly fell. I Jumped up and down so fast I got dizzy. I still couldn't believe it. I ran, jumped, and spun around. Then my parents called us in. I ran inside before anybody else. When we got inside you could feel the excitement in the air. First we ate the cake then I got to open presents! I was so excited I couldn't sit still. Everyone wanted me to open there present first. But I thought alphabetical would work best. I opened present after present and thanked everyone. Then my grandparents came over. When I opened the present from them I jumped up and yelled "O.M.G O.M.G!" then everyone said "What is it." and I said "IT'S A PUPPYYYYYY." I carefully took her out of the box and placed her on the ground. She started waging her tail, yipping, and jumping around playfully. Everyone loved her. I decided to name her Looloo. because

2 comments:

  1. I love the part about the puppy, but it was breife and you really didn't paint a picture of joy you just said it which really wasn't the point of this assignment.
    you should try doing something like this...
    "her face turned bright red from all the jumping, and was speechless with the excitment and joy of a new puppy"
    try showing instead of telling more!

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  2. I also loved the part about your puppy. Out of all the posts that you have i think this is your best one. Your spelling was really good too.

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