This is about my GR6 yearend trip.We were just coming out of IMAX and we where looking over the raling.
I could feel the wind in my face it was cool and so salty it was like licking a salt shaker. Listening to the gulls the sound of the peaceful waves. Te smooth railing felt like rubber under my fingers. My friends happily screaming and running around. The water was dark blue. It was so humid it was like breathing under water. The cool ocean mist made my face all wet it looked like I had just finished taking a shower.
Good job! I liked how you said "The cool ocean mist made my face all wet it looked like I hade just finished taking a shower." There are a few flaws. I think that in some parts it went to fast, but this is your rough copy so in your next copy i think it will be very much better. :)
ReplyDeleteyou are a really good writer, your description is way cool.
ReplyDeleteyou may want to look at how you spelled a few things. please continue to have fun writing.